Brave New Girl
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Brave New Girl (Brave New Girl, Book 1) by Rachel Vincent
Conceptually strong, structurally weak. 👥
Brave New Girl is one of those YA dystopias that sounds sharper on the jacket than it feels on the page. Dahlia 16 is one of 5,000 identical girls raised to garden and obey. Individuality is a defect. Attraction is a defect. Getting caught being either one can get your entire genome recalled, which is a polite way of saying wiped out. Then she gets stuck in an elevator with Trigger 17, a soldier cadet, and the whole setup is supposed to crack open from there.
One thing I did like is how Dahlia 16 doesn’t know what common words, phrases, or things are. It’s a good attempt at world building, and it works as a sign of how isolated the various classes are from each other. You feel how small her life has been without the book having to lecture you about it.
Unfortunately, that is almost the only piece of world building that lands. There is an astonishing lack of it overall. There is almost no basis on which to envision what this world looks like. Everything is so generic and under-described that the city has no identity. Buildings, crowds, daily routines, the look of the place, all of it stays vague. You get rules and job titles and barcodes, but not a world you can actually picture.
The clone angle is the other big problem, and it is completely unnecessary. I don’t really see the point of why they needed to be clones. The population could easily have been normal people. You could have kept the social structure, the class split, the jobs, the gender roles, the hierarchy, all of it, and the story likely would have been much cleaner. As written, the clone premise is ultimately detrimental to the romance. If Dahlia and Trigger are each 1 of 5,000 identical clones, how are they able to constantly find each other in a crowd? That question never really gets a satisfying answer, and it keeps poking holes in scenes that are supposed to feel charged, as if the book is running purely on vibes.
Speaking of the romance, the instalove trope is especially heavy. A couple-minute conversation in an elevator is all it took? I get that forbidden contact is the point, but the jump from strangers to soulmates is so fast it undercuts the danger the book keeps insisting is there. Making them ordinary people from rigidly separated groups would have made that pull a lot more understandable.
From an editing standpoint, there also seem to be some missing transitions. Going from one scene to another can sometimes be jarring, or confusing as to how they got there. You are in one place, then you are in another. Things are quiet, then they’re loud. And the book does not always bother to bridge the gap. Combined with the thin setting, those jumps make the story feel slighter than it wants to be.
The concept is intriguing: a girl who is not supposed to want anything, a boy she is not supposed to notice, and a system that will punish thousands of people for one person’s transgressions. But the book never builds a world or develops characters strong enough to hold it.
